I can't believe you finally updated!!! It has been forever!!! I'm so happy now!!! I love the story and it was a great chapter. Please continue to update soon!!! Report Review
THIS STORY IS AMAZING! The characters are just how I've always imagined them to be and the plot is flawless. Lily and James are so in love and they are perfect for each other!!! I cannot wait to see what happens next and I hope you'll update soon!
-Jaz Report Review
So er hi?
First of all, I love this story! I've read it before but I reread it when this chapter and I just fell in love all over again. Seriously, it's a great story and I love the family line ties, it makes for a very interesting story and I would love to see where all that is gonna go.
I love Lauren, she's one of my favorite characters and it'll be so sad when she dies or whatever (Harry has no family so I'm assuming...but you know what they say about assuming, please) but I do really like her.
I love the friendship between Lily and Sirius, its really funny and her temper is great with him.
James. man. Oh my god I love him. He's so cute and over protective and loves Lily ridiculous amounts and them two together is adorable.
Lily is great and I love that she works in the DOM, it's a much more interesting place for her to work than what you usually get, it really shows off her skills and gives loads of opportunities for interesting occurrences.
Basically, your story is really well written and I haven't noticed any grammatical errors (grammar nazi for the win). It's also surprisingly canon considering the whole blood lines thing. I love this because it means that I can like believe the story if that makes sense but you've still given it your own little twist.
So congratulations on an amazing story and please update soon (:
Kx Report Review
Awww! Lily is expecting! James is amazing - so sweet and caring. I was thrilled to read this update - thank you! Report Review
awesome glad you are back Report Review
WOW !!! awesome it is please please please tell me you are writing more of it ans soon.I cant wait to read Report Review
This was such an awesome story!! I really want to know more and see this story through until their deaths. Keep up the good work! Report Review
Spent the past couple of days reading this story and it was great :D well worth spending my time reading it :) Report Review
hey, weren't the McKinnons supposed to die around the time of Harry's first birthday? I think Lily mentioned it in the letter to Sirius that Harry finds in grimmauld place... Report Review
i just have to say that while reading this story i entirely forgot that it wasn't J.K.Rowling who wrote it. You did an amazing job and i just loved it!! Report Review
please please write more as soon as you can!!! i really really loved it.i want to read till their death!!! please! Report Review
This is so amazing! :D Please tell me you're continuing this?! I have become a HUGE Jily fan all because of this story. You are really an amazing writer. :)
this is an amazing story! i keep on rereading it cuz its so good.
plz plz plz write more chapters?? I would LUV 2 read more chapters! Thnx so much:) PLZ UPDATE! Report Review
Wow. This is REALLY good! So, my question to you, is: Will you PLEASE update?! I must know what happens next! Report Review
Is this story abandoned if not please update! Report Review
Keep writing!!! This series is awesome!! :-) Report Review
I found I had written reviews for other chapters, so I decided to write it here. I just re-read chapter 37, and it struck me! I had, since a long time, suspected that Remus would fit in with Lauren, but how, I had no idea. Lauren being the subject of interest of a Vampire finally brings things into place. Werewolves and Vampires are natural enemies. Great writing! Please, please post chapter 40 soon. Its been so long! Report Review
AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME
when will we get to read the next chapters! Report Review
Absolutely loved the whole story, its kept me reading well into the night so that i could see how the match made in hogwarts happened!! You have such a talent for literacy which has had me constantly enthralled by the drama. However it shouldn't stop here, it isnt a suitably amazing ending to match the amazing story. Keep writing untill they find out Lovely Lilly is pregnant, that would be a apropraite end. But that is the only negative i can possibly think of :) Report Review
Awsome! Please write more ASAP!
10/10 Report Review
This series is great!!! Keep them coming! :]Author's Response: ty! and u bet! Report Review
So, a few years back, I started reading this story. My account got deleted (or rather, my email and I forgot my password so I could not email a new one) and I had forgotten about it. A few days ago, I was searching for a story and found this one! I can't tell you how excited I have been. I have been reading for four days straight. I stay up until one or two every morning and wake up by eight just to read this. When I'm not home, or on my break at work, I'm reading it off my phone. Heck, last Sunday, I spent the entire service reading it!! (hmmm, study God or read about witchcraft?)
I think it is clear that I am very addicted to this story and I want nothing more than for you to update very soon!! It saddens me when I think that with Lily getting pregnant soon, the story line will come to an end. Lily Evans (or Potter) is my favorite character!! I know she dies, but I don't want her to!!
A++ in my book!! Keep up the amazing work and update soon, please!!Author's Response: lol. you seriously sound like me...with a lot of my own favorite fan fiction. the next chapter is 80% complete and then i need to edit the final half of it. i try and work on it when i get the itch to write. these last 10 chapters are the harder chapters because i want them to be exactly as i envisioned them. i can't forget the tiny details or it just won't be right. thanks so much for the nice review and there will definitely be more! ;) Report Review
THIS IS SOOO GOOD!!! Report Review
Wow - your story is a beast! It has taken several days but I just finished all 39 chapters. It has been a pleasure to read it. The story has gotten darker and darker as the events also darkened. You have done a really nice job with the characters - especially Lily and James. You have set up the spy in the order scenario so that it does seem like it might be Remus. Thank you for sharing your work!Author's Response: thanks! and don't worry, there is more to come with the order! ;) Report Review
What happened to chapter 32?Author's Response: because some of the validators don't like me; i think it's mor ehtan a little fishy that i get validated...then not validated...then validated...then - you get the picture. hopefully things should be fine in a few days when things are re-validated. Report Review
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