Welcome back! Thanks for continuing this! Can't wait to read Draco's diary!
Cheers!Author's Response: Glad that you're enjoying the story so far!! Watch this space for more! Report Review
great chapter plz do moreAuthor's Response: Thank you very much! Report Review
First off, you should fix your spacing on this chapter itís doubled. Other than that, simply said well done. I donít know what else to say. It was really quick. I liked the quick little kiss and clean getaway. Easily written. Thanks for requesting.Author's Response: Thank you very much. I have tried to fix the double spacing, but have failed multiple times. It just keeps telling me that I need the double spacing. If you know the fix, give me a heads up please. Report Review
I think that this is an interesting one shot. Not many people write their Dramoines from this angle, which I think really makes the piece stand out.
There were a couple phrases that you used that didn't really make sense, where I thought you may have used the wrong word. I would definitely look through for that if I were you. Also I would go through and get rid of the large space between all your paragraphs it's quite bothersome as a reader. I had to scroll every two seconds.Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. although I've also found the gaps bothersome, I'll try to eradicate them :P Report Review
i thought that this was a cute, mainly realistic one-shot that you mixed up. you did a nice job of developing Draco with a lot of background information and i believe that that is the real thing that makes this so believable right now. i liked how you wrote Draco's POV and have no CC at all in that area of this one-shot.
you, however, were worried more about the ending and i think that you have nothing to worry about with that either. i liked how you ended the dialogue there and then added a final paragraph of his wishes and desires. it was a nice touch that i think added a lot to the air of the story so congratulations there.
Soppy? i don't think that this was too soppy or not enough but seeing as it is a shorter story it is sort of difficult to decipher at this moment. sorry, but i am not the best at telling if a story is too one way or too the other because having a review thread, everything mixes together and one thing becomes the other.
overall, i thought that this was a nice story, especially for being your very first attempt at a romance. you should definitely continue with this genre in the future. wonderful job, dear. feel free to come back with more requests anytime you wish.Author's Response: There is a reason I love your reviews! Thank you very much, you have settled my fears and influensed me to further the story. May have to tell you when it comes out ;) Report Review
i love your story it is inventive and very realistic...i mean what guy hasn't been mean to a girl or started fights with them to hide how they really feel?? lol it happens all the time.
i love it. alos it's in draco's p.o.v. and that is rare in Dramione stories. please keep writting.
thank you.Author's Response: I always hope that I have some originality in my stories, so thank you very much for this review. Hope you like the rest of the story too. Report Review
WOW that was realy good...i realy wasnt expecting that, but im realy realy glad i read it now! great job! i'll be waiting for an update pls pls pls do it soon. oh and if your looking for another story to write, a recomend a harry and hermione ship...i absolutely LOVE the pairing...i have some suggestions if your interested just look for my next review in the next chapie.Author's Response: Hmmm, could be a good idea, thank you very much. Report Review
WOW, what a great banner, I mean seriously, who made you that banner???
And as I read through the story for you already I knew it was great anyway. I hate Dramione though... It was well written however :D
LOVE YOUAuthor's Response: The banner was written by some bimbo I paid in Dr Pepper and Vodka :P
Thanks for the review though MWAH Report Review
OH MY FRIGGIN GOD! I LOVE THIS!Author's Response: Thank you very much! I absolutely love that you have enjoyed this story so very much! :) Report Review
I like the chapter. I like it that in your story Draco seems to be the one falling in love first. I do hope that you will upload the next chapter fast! Can't wait to read it. :)Author's Response: Working on it as we speak! Hope you enjoy it. Report Review
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