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Review:Yuu says:
Well, I enjoyed this pretty much although I can't believe you left it there!

I wonder how Cassie came to find Hermione just like that. I also pretty Neville very much in his sadness because of Luna leaving.

Just one thing. you tend to mention Muggle things with wizards that shouldn't know much about them. For example, Ron said that he had seen the bit about vampires in a movie. I don't think Ron would know what a movie is, seeing that he is a pureblood. It would make more sense if he said that his mother read it to him in a bedtime story or that one of his brothers, like Bill or Charlie, told him about it. -- With Neville, it was the bit of the phone number. Neville is also a pureblood so I don't think he would know much about phones or Muggle postal mail. He could always try sending an owl though. ;) Just some tips I thought I had to point out. Hope not to annoy you. I also tend to forget things like that. It's easier to think the Muggle way. :)


Author's Response: More will be explained about Cassie in the sequel. And yeah I never realized the mistakes I made with Ron and Neville, i'll try and correct them. I have alot ahead of me with the sequel, I don't know how the long the story will be! Thank you so much for reviewing :)

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