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Review:Lyn Midnight says:
Oh, so this is an AU, seeing that Lily has a brother.

First of all, some tiny suggestions.

Better not add information in brackets. It does not look so good.

You are overdoing the emphasis at places. Like when you wrote about 10 exclamation marks. you only need one.

Just a suggestion, Versace is not the best name for the HP Universe.

"How did it go Lily?" should be "How did it go, Lily?" Mind the punctuation. Beta readers are great, why don't you get one?!

(NOTE: Wendy and Rachel Prewett are Molly Weasley's sisters! Also, for those who don't know- Molly Weasley's maiden name was Prewett, as Joanne Kathleen Rowling tells us at her website) This should be included in the A/N, not in the middle of the fic!

Then, the parts I liked:

I am so happy that it was in the Marauder era. I love those. I just hope you don't mind CC, because that's what i do. Nothing harsh, just realistic!

Wow, such detail on the exam. I must admit, this is a first! no one ever wrote about what those exams were about. Very intriguing! Where did you get the prosedures from? Did you make them up?

It's cool that the girls have nicknames, just as the marauders do.

It was so nice that Lily thanked him after all. And their little conversation was funny! Also, it is so strange that Dumbledore would arrange the seats in order, but I like the fact that they will both spend more time face to face :P

Great job for a first fic! There were no major mistakes, the chapter was light and enjoyable. Keep it up!

Sorry, but I don't like to rate, simply because I am not good at it. I'll just mess it up, and will en up being the bad one, or the incompetent one. Nevertheless, I would give yours 7 for the effort and interesting idea :)

Author's Response: Hey thanks so much for the honest review!! :)
Um, I did get a beta reader actuallly, and I posted it like he gave it to me. I guess I should have checked over it after he gave it back. I'll mind your suggestions, thanks for the A/N comment!


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