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Review:PhoenixStorm says:
OMG! I LOVE it! Seriously, one of the best Ron/Hermione's I've ever read. You made me laugh a lot in this, I think I'll go recommend it when I'm done writing this :D .

You seem to have a thing about lacking in credit :p , you need to credit the song lyrics. dance with her.’ Said Harry this is a consistent problem in this fic. when someone speaks you use commas not fullstops like '"blah," said Harry'. I'm sure there was another thing to do with dialogue that I've noticed, but I've forgotten, sorry. Just check it over for the dialogue though. frolicked around in that patronizing way if we're going for british spelling that should be 'patronising' but if you're not then just ignore that one :) .

Well now, where to start? Let's go for Ron because I just adored how you wrote him here. You had his personality down so very well, in fact you characterised everyone perfectly i think, but as this was from Ron's POV, he shone through the most. From It’s a battlefield! You could get killed out there! and there was no way I was going out there. It was dangerous. Men could die out there. I didn’t want to risk it to I’m not good enough for her you had him down so well. I could just picture and hear everything Ron said in this and I loved it. I also thought I’d rather be her friend and like her from…y’know, afar, then not have her in my life at all was really sweet and also incredibly real, I'm sure most people have thought something along these lines at one point or other.

The humour you have in this fic is great, I loved it all. You made me laugh (really loudly I might add, it just took me by surprise in places :p ) with things like I’m not that stupid even if I look it.’ Truer words were never said and I didn’t know how to dance but if you just step around in a big circle with the girl by your side then it’s basically the same thing. heehee, I'm even grinning now :D . I also really liked this line from harry Honestly Ron, that is the stupidest thing I’ve ever heard and you say heaps of stupid things! it made me smile and it was a really Harry thing to say to Ron.

I loved the part when he's dancing with Hermione of course, it was wirtten so well. And Harry's part in that dance was also great Harry was standing near the Weird Sisters with a smug look on his face. I would kill him later. My absolute favourite line in this fic was also in here We had a moment. One of those real, “look-deeply-into-the-eyes-and-actually-see-something-other-than-an-eyeball” moments, you just have a wonderful way of phrasing things. It was touching and lovely, but funny and very Ron at the same time. Loved reading this, amazing fic :) .

Author's Response: wow, that's a ... beautiful review, im kinda lost for words. yeah, im sorta over here in australia, patronizing would be different... but again wow, im really glad you liked this story so much, and its great when you can connect with the characters, its satisfying in a way. ron's such a hilarious character and i think the love/hate relationship he has with hermione is really good to expand on in stories. lol, that was purple_peppermint_25's favourite line in the story too! im really glad you liked it and thanks so much for dropping it a review! it means a lot!

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