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Review:Lyn Midnight says:
Ha, I loved it! Those two are so funny, they cannot stay apart, always playing cat and mouse games. Honestly, you made me laugh with that "Plan" of his and her teasing... Ok, here goes... I noticed that there are quite a few commas missing... Like in tag questions, after "oh", before of course and when you are referring to someone. Before I thought there were not so many commas in this language but it turned out that they should be used quite often, almost everywhere, sometimes before but, and, etc... So if you find it hard to spot these places, you should get a Beta... Also some words should be written in capital letters, like transfiguration, Marauders... There is a place in the beginning where you have used two identical questions one after the other... "So, ... then?" You overuse tag questions /do not forget to put the comma in place, for example... "He is the one, isn't he?"/ This is very important! Also it should be "but then AGAIN she had always be strong"... So I guess the most amusing part /and thus the title/ was when you mixed the unmixable! GREEN AND PINK! It makes me laugh when I picture Snape with a wild pink MANE :P As for, James, I thought that it would have been easier if he just listened to Remus, Anyways, I enjoyed reading this fic and I hope you will write more about the infamous couple... hint*hint* Have a nice day! :) ~LM~

Author's Response: *giggles* do you know how many times I've advised people to get a beta/beta'd for people? Sorry, the irony made me laugh :D. But you are right, this story was written a long time ago and was never beta'd at the time, it more than likely needs the usual once over :). I promise my grammar and punctuation is a lot better now; I do, for instance, know where to use commas the majority of the time :D. But thank you for explaining that, very thoughtful of you :).

lol, I'm glad you liked the humour in this story. The pink hair is rather overused now in pranks (I'm more imaginative now too ;) ), but I'm happy you found it funny :). Ah well, Remus is the voice of reason and wisdom, but when do we ever listen to tha? :D. I am currently writing a marauder era fic now actually, 20chapters are up already; you're welcome to check it out but don't feel you have to :). Thanks for the lovely review! :)


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