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Review:Ollie says:
wait! so there was a rain cloud inside the cave? didnt all his stuff get wet? and she so readily fell in love with him? i like that line: two lips become one. can i steal it? lol, cause im always trying to find a better way to describe kissing, found a few good ones, but i like that one. that bit in the last chapter with james nad sirius trying to turn all the lilies into doves was classic. i wonder though, would they turn into doves if ALICE touched them? that would be intersting, thatd make them HER lilies more, y'know? well wow, you finished it, ok...thats the end. ohh *sniffle sniffle* what do i do now? well i love it, its such a romantic thing that frank did, i wish a guy would do that for me, though i didnt really expect alice to actually hold on to the broom, cause man she must have read that poem really quick! however you couldve let frank escape that time and she couldve caught him another time, like maybe you know how lily was trying to find out? you couldve added that in too...if lily ever got any clues or anything. cause lily's meant to be wonderful-smart-person so if she didn't figure it out, wow, frank's way smarter! but still, i love this story, the flowers in there too make it so much more beautiful and poetic. but what happened to that guy Klo something? the one she had the daffodil connection with? that would be intersting, lily couldve thought it was him or something and that could cause a stir....i dunno, just thinking. but i still love the sotry, its so adorably wonderful and i love it!

Author's Response: lol that was supposed to be a metaphor but i didnt do it very well, oh :( yeah I wasnt happy with the falling in love really fast part, I not sure, geez i really should go though and tighten up the ending. yeah the kissing line kinda came from that spice girls song about two become one, you know it? Wow I loving all your idea! That a good one for teh doves and Alice I should so make it like that...if you dont mind. Aw I sorry thast I gave you such a lame ending thankyou for enjoying it. Lol yeah her holding onto the broom was a bit weird especially after she was really sick lol randomness. I really should have styuck to my original ending, which kinda went like you have said. Like lily comes up and sayd she narrowed it down to like sirius, kloy and marvin. Then it like a mystery, but obvious at the same time. The koy patr was to kind of distract the reader and cause then to think that it was kloy who was sending the flowers. Thankyou again and again, you are awesome thanks!! :D

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