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Review:PhoenixStorm says:
I'd just like to say I really admire your ability to write drabbles, I'd never be able to do it and I htink yours turned out really well. I also like, though it's probably unintentional, that your note and disclaimer and titles all add up to another 100 so this fic is exactly 800 words! sorry, I found that interesting ;).

You have a few mistakes and I know it may be hard to change them because it will mess with your word counts, but I'm pointing them out anyway :p. Bill Weasley felt so small standing the line and waiting his sorting standing in line, and awaiting or waiting for. He was barely three feet off the ground and could barely open his eyes he was so scared rethink this sentence, repetition of barely. After Potion’s was over no apostrophe. he also would have never become friends this particular word order is repeated twice before this as well. It should be either would never have or never would have (I can't decide which sounds better, but what you have should definitely be changed somehow ;), sorry I'm not being particularly helpful there *rolls eyes*).

well I think this is a wonderfully written set of drabbles. I've read one other entry to this challenge (SophiaMontgomery's) and I am very impressed with you both. This fic captures lovely moments from the Weasleys' lives, and I love how you build around canon events especially. It definitely adds something to the story.

I like how you went in order of age and started off in Bills's saying He was scared he would disappoint his parents or set a bad example for his many younger siblings because it's the complete opposite perspective to the one we get in the books (Ron's). One of them had to be first and I shuld think it would be equally as stressful to be the oldest and set the standard than be one of the youngest and live up to expectations.

I love the various humorous parts you have in here, especially Percy's already embarrassed himself by falling into the Hogwarts lake that made me grin and is something i could well believe. Also in Fred's How could this man separate him from his twin brother, his only friend, just because they had purposely caused an explosion for a laugh? It was injustice, pure and simple *laughs* very like the twins, really could picture one of them saying that :D . And I like how you mentioned Lee and how they got to be friends with him too. Wonderful fic you have here, great job on the challenge :).

Author's Response: I found that intersting too, though it was unintentional. I'll change those things, and thanks for telling me of them; I appreciate it. I'm glad that you liked it. I never really thought about Bill's feelings until taking up this challenge, but when you think about it, he had to be nervous. I try to add some humor to all of my fics; it really helps to balance things out, IMO, and I couldn't write anything with the twins without humor. I loved this challenge. Thanks so much for the amazing review; I do believe it is one of the best I've received.

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