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Review:Hiduras says:
"...stood out in her tan face." it should be "tanned", just a small thing!

I like the idea of the one-shot, but it seems to me like you are trying to get a whole story cooked down to only a thousand words, and that is too bad. In a story like this I think you should concetrate on the mourning girl, instead of what happened to everyone.

The strongest parts of the story are when she shifts between being angry with Harry and missing him, that really spoke to me (almost cried at one point.).

You mentioned the Weasley, Hermione and some other people we know of, but who is her mother?? I couldn’t help but wonder about that.

Ron seems like a character you are comfotable writing, it is really too bad you didn’t use him more... I think it confused me because you seemed to be in the mind of both Danica and Ron, I would have choosen one and stuck with it. Actually, the more I thimk about it, the more I like the thought of seeing it from Rons point of view, then you could have all the background story and still hearing Danica talk to her dead father... It is just a thought!

Well all in all I like the story and the plot, but I think you could have given us more... am I totally off base here?

Accept for that one little thing I mentioned in the beginning, I saw no gramma mistakes or anything of the sort... You did a great job with that! To be perfectly honest, I think this would make a great chaptered fic, but maybe that is not what you want to do...

Thank you for a good read; Heidi

Author's Response: Thanks, and actually, there is a chaptered version of it, a sort of continuation of it, it's called 'Moving On' so yeah. Her mother was not important, just someone Harry met after Hogwarts. I'll fix the tan thingy. I'm sort of rewriting it, and it probably will be from Ron's PoV. He'd just have to get there earlier, which is no problem. I'm really glad you liked it and thanks for reviewing! -sarah

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