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Review:Rebekka says:
I'm so glad I'm finally here. This is the first story I've read from you. :) And aren't I lucky to read such a wonderful piece of literature. I knew you were good writer, but I never knew how good. All the while I was reading this, I felt sadness in my heart, but it was constantly lifted by the hopefulness of your words. It was perfectly done. Sad song with a "happy" moment. Works beautifully in your hands.

My very favorite line was: "Smudges on their noses and frogs in their pocket, they had set out to conquer the world." That is just so unbearably cute and such a youthful way of seeing things. You have a unique voice... I love that about writers. You use words differently and give your own meaning to moments passing us by.

You changed tenses a few times from present to past, but it wasn't too harmful. Here is one: "He glanced down at the graves one last time and let go, moving quickly up towards Tonks." And also I think in this sentence you meant it to be 'vanquished': "he vanished some litter from the area and stood silently in front of the headstones." I'm not sure though. :)

I absolutely adored this story and it's going into my favorites. I love the way you write and how the undertone of your story is future/love/happiness even though it's so sad that I had tears in my eyes the whole time I read it. Amazing job, Lauren.

Author's Response: Thank you Rebekka, I am so glad that enoyed this, especially since I respect your writing.

I thnk that line is one my favourite things I've ever written, it's just so simple and since I'm kind of obsessed with the idea of innocence lost, it kind of portrays that (I hope)

I have a horrible time with tenses, I've no idea why I find them so difficult to correct, thanks for pointing it out, I'll eventually get round to editing all of this ;) And it was supposed to be vanished, I saw the word used in OotP for a similar sort of spell, so I used it too.

Thanks you again for taking the time to review, I am so glad you enjoyed it.


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