|Review:||crystal allan says:|
First, I want to apologize for keeping you waiting so long. I’ve been sick for the past three weeks and busy with the holidays, but I didn’t forget about you – I just didn’t want to give a half hearted review ^_^
Well, first of all, I adore your descriptions. They are so full of avvibrancy that really brings this story to life in a way that I can’t even begin describe. The intricate detail was amazing and beautiful, nearly tangible. You conveyed each emotion perfectly – the confusion and uncertainty, even hesitancy – to the point of drawing the reader in entirely. I love when writers can do that – it is an amazing talent. You don’t go on and on with your words – it's short and simple. Little things that aren’t usually recognized but actually add to the story overall. You don’t try to over explain but you give us enough to satisfy that curiosity and craving.
I like that you didn’t tell us right away who this character was. I don’t know why but that always spikes my curiosity even more, and keeps me looking for the little clues author’s drop. But you didn’t make it clear until he was speaking to McGonagall – and I thought that was a nice touch. I enjoyed the ‘revelation’ paragraphs when he’s thinking of his parents. Those were just heartrending to read. You really poured a lot of emotion into that bit and, even thought I hate admitting this I will (only because you had to wait so long for a review ^_^), I cried there. I really did. I don’t often cry while reading a story but for some reason that just broke my own resolve. It was such a beautifully elegant portion and I can’t even fully explain how touching it was.
Dumbledore – in the brief mentions of him that you have here you managed to convey everything that I love about his character. You captured his charm and wit so perfectly, better than half the people on HPFF. He is a hard character to write, and a lot of people do it so badly, but this was just wonderful.
That ending was a remarkable twist. I didn’t believe it at first, and I actually re-read that part twice just to make sure my eyes weren’t playing tricks. It was so absolutely unexpected and thoroughly refreshing.
Saying that I loved this story isn’t enough, but it is all I really can say to even capture a glimpse of how I feel about it. When I find the time, probably after the holidays, I’m going to start on your chapter story :-)
Author's Response: .... uhm.... ok... just totally speachless here... Thank you so much for everything you noticed, it really shows that you read it closely. I had heard that you give great reviews, but this is just... wow! I don't mind waiting for something like this... I am really glad you liked the description, that is something I have really worked on for the past half year (since I joined HPFF) and when you read my chaptered fic, you will see that the first chapters are not nearly as good as the last ones... In this type of story, it is really important for me to keep some mystique... I feel like it gives me room to explain more instead of just saying "this is Neville" and then expecting everyone to know him. ..... Dumbledore... he is my favorite character to write, I don't know why though. I love him so much and I just "understand" what JKR want's him to be I think... (or at least I understand what I wnat her to whant him to be...)... Last bit not least, the ending, well it just came to me... I hadn't planned it like that, but when I got Neville in the past, I just had to do that!.... Once angain; thank you for the stunning review, I really hope you'll like "Freya" as well, even though it does have the mark og being my first fic!