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Review:trixytonks says:
I like the concept of this story, the idea of Lily watching Harry always, of being in his dreams, guiding him. It's really a nice thought that should offer him some comfort, some closure. I think you write his trauma very well and the song is very fitting. however, I have to say it took me a lot to actually read this for one reason only - the punctuation. Why have you got three ... after everything? I know that in english it signifies a pause, but you overdo it. There are times when it is fitting:

All I see is the pain I’ve not been able to stop... the pain I’ve caused by just being Harry Potter...

and then there are other times when you really should consider using a semi-colon or a comma, or even just a period

“Hiya Harry” James waved, “That was a great catch at the Ravenclaw match last weekend. Very proud, son, very proud.”

If I was you, I'd go over your stories and work on the punctuation. It'll add to the content and really boost the quality of your stories. You're a good writer - don't let something so easily fixed get you down.

Author's Response: Yes, your remark on the elipses is valid. I totally overuse them, without a doubt. I will go over it and edit when I have some time. This actually has only been edited once since its completion, and that was for some coding problem... It was my first, so I'm sure its very rough around the edges. I appreciate your review, and I will look over all my "..."'s as soon as I can. :) Thank you!

Author's Response: I just edited out about 45 "..."'s. You were so right -- they were beginning to annoy me, and I wrote them. Thank you Trixy!! Very very very good advice!

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