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Review:Ever Lasting Nightmare says:
Hi, you asked me to review awhile ago. Sorry for the delay, I got caught up in my problems. I like the premise of this story, the blending of your own charactors with the mix of J.K's. It's very interesting. Your family reminds me of the Malfoy family, your charactor (Sita) is like Draco turned into a girl(With nicest.) P:. I love the combination of detail and dialogue. It's like my own style which is built off Hemingway and Anne Tylor.(You probulary don't know what I'm talking about) It is always a good start to mix description into dialogue. Now for improving your skills- Here is something most writers do: explain. Instead of dreams or flashbacks, show your readers through dislogue. Explain what happen in the past while adding tension and drama.(I think you did that pretty well though) Keep the energy level high, let your readers figure things out for themselves, but don't confuse them too much. Focuse on other well know charactors as well, you want your readers to like your charactor, but you also want them to have a leading interest in Sirius, James, etc. Make your charactor(Sita)go through a lot of trouble, danger, etc. Let readers feel her pain.(It helps.) I really liked your ideas, keep writing. I'll be reading, even if I don't leave a review for every chapter. Nice work!

Author's Response: No worries about the delay, thanks for reviewing. Thanks very much for your input, I really appreciate the points you've made. I'll def. be taking them into consideration. Thanks again <3

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