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Review:the5thmarauder says:
I liked this chapter, I thought the characterisation of Ron and Ginny once more was excellent, they were both in canon and you seem to have the ability to keep them that way. That is very, very, very rare in fanfiction so well done!

I love the use of over languages in this fic aswell it gives it a slight edge, I think it is really great that you are including stuff like this, it is a great idea for fics everywhere! Well done!

I find the use of a myth/ ancestrial heritage very intriguing and I can't wait to read it further. I do, however, think that her being the first girl in many centuries is too much like Ginny for my liking, I hope it doesn't affect the story too much her being the only girl but I think there would have been a better way of bringing her inheriting the powers in the sight. An example would be merely a prophecy describing her as the person who would be the next seer, the next girl is just a bit too Ginny-ish for me. Sorry, I do try to be honest. I do think this will turn out to be a very interesting story with this kind of stuff included, so kudos to you!

I don't want to insult your betas but this line just doesn't look right, I may be wrong, just have a look over it or something, She barely remembered anything of the start of term meal or Dumbledore's speech; but one thing she did remember was his lack of introducing a new Defence Against the Dark Arts teacher. I just think the use of a semi-colon is wrong, maybe a comma. Also you mispelt "Ravenclaw", you spelt it "Rawenclaw", I know it is a typo but it won't take a second to correct so I thought I would just say it. Also It was her family's Raven, Mia. the Raven should be raven with a lowercase 'r'.

Other than that it is simply fantastic and read over my postive comments to see what I mean. Just so you know this review may seem harsh but I try and have an equilibrium between the good and the bad points just to help people improve. :)

Author's Response: I love it when people are honest, and I prefer it! It helps me improve, even if there are some things that I don't agree with! I'll ask my betas about the sentence... Urgh.. I hate typo's they are so stupid... Thank you for mentioning it! About the Ginny thing.. well I have never thought of her as the first girl in a long time, only as the first girl in this "small" family... Arthur could have sisters... I know that this could have been done with a prophecy, but I think those are rare, and I would like to make Harry staand out as much as possible because of that...

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