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Review:the5thmarauder says:
I really liked this chapter. I loved the pacing and the immediate explanation of where she was from and how she "sat alone". I think the use of the German word for dogs was good a subtle way of using another language to make the animal seem magical.

I must be honest and say I was worried when you said she had been given special permission to have the dog, I think at that point you hadn't explained he was magical, that was probably why. It set the "special" Mary-Sue alarms off, but you rescued it with the explanation of the magical abilities the "Hunds" pocess.

I thought the characterisation of Harry was terrific, he seemed really normal and down to earth Harry. I also thought the reaction of Freya as an outsider to the "Golden Trio" was good in response to the entrance of Hermione and Ron.

The only problem I saw with the plot was the reason for her parents not being there. Surely, if they are adults, they would be able to apparate whilst she took a portkey? I don't know it was just something that cropped up. Also for a moment there at the beginning when it says She wasn’t a little kid anymore, and in her third year at Hogwarts the Danish Ministry of Magic I got a little confused as I thought she was a fifth year which is explained later, it just seems to be a bit of a random reference and it made me wonder is she a fifth year or a third year. Those are the only constructive crits I have for this chapter, which is a very little number so, WELL DONE!

Author's Response: Thank you for the thought out review! I haven't thought about the apparation... I'll have to look in to that! The point about the whole 5th year/ 3rd year thing, was that the first time she did it alone was in her 3rd year... now she is in her 5th! Thank you!

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