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Review:Eyo says:
Hello there! First I would like to thank you for this wonderful story. I love it, Fee is one of the most interesting OC i read since well since quite a long time!

There is two things that attract me so much into your story and if obviously the first one is Fee I have to say I'm bias toward detective story so really this story is jackpot.

As I said I really love Fee, she's amazing because for once we have a main character who is mean egoist and ambitious not saying she's a bad person but as now in the story you put a really strong emphasis on that, and you balance it with her friendly attitude and determined mind but also her strong sensibility. We actually have a character who looks real and that's pretty good and quite rare.

I'm also happy with the fact that's it's a girl, it's nice to read about girl who isn't a Mary Sue/Tsundere/"place any other cliche". Girls also has the right to be ambitious in their work and mess up with relationship. It's rafrashing to read your story because of that, I can stop to love Fee even with all her defaults.

A bad point maybe would be the others characters they are pretty empty, the worst is maybe James whose we know nothing about. Apparently he's an asshole even it's a bit hard to see that for me as now. But I'm pretty sure you gonna develop him later in your story.

Also but maybe it's simply a follow up from the last point Fee's friends are weirdly useless. I mean they never confront Fee to the truth of what she's doing. Didn't tell her that she wasn't being fair with Noseman for example. To be honest they appear a bit useless to me.

It was very enlightening how Fee hesitated to take the mission of spying because she though it was wrong but rapidly changed her mind after thinking about the promotion.

I think boys or girls can relate to her easily because she is what most of us are. We hurt important peoples for us by mistake or blindness, we interpret in our own mind events by that I mean we imagine the answer we want even if sometimes it's far from the truth. And of course we are ambitious!

I can't wait to see what's going to happen next, and I hope development for James and maybe some more realistic "best friends" ?

Oh and by the way I cant wait for the plot to enhance a bit. It's a good start the crazy potion is always a promising beginning for me.

Thanks again!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! :)

Really glad you like Fiona, writing OCs can be tricky. As for Rose and Jasper, they're mostly present for comic relief so I wouldn't expect big things in terms of development (i.e., they will definitely continue to be useless), but they might be shown in more interesting contexts in future chapters.

Thanks again for your review!


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