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Review:Amanda says:
I truly enjoyed this story at the beginning. However, the constant back and forth between Yves and Sirius/Severus is highly frustrating and unrealistic. She comes across, lately, as a Mary Sue. She's constantly running away crying and wailing instead of facing her problems. She's constantly got drama going on with Sirius when any woman worth her salt would have gotten away from that unhealthy situation. And, realistically, she would have turned away from Sirius after his attempt on Snapes life. I know that she killed a Muggle and has no place to judge, but if someone looked at me with empty murderous filled eyes, I would not be so quick to forgive. Especially when she SUPPOSEDLY loves SNAPE all of a sudden. She just promised the man she "loves" that she's done with Sirius and yet runs right back to him. Again. If someone attempts to kill a man you love, you'd hold him in your arms, yearn to kiss him and feel badly for hurting him? Idt so. Yves has just become annoying as of late and her constant back and forth is stale.

On a more positive note. I continue to read (for now) because your ideas are fresh, as far as the situations and plot goes. There is very strong, descriptive writing. Which I very much enjoy and appreciate. However. If things don't change with Yves soon, I will be discontinuing my reading of this story. I'm not saying that she should stay with SNAPE or I wont return. But she should stay with him for at least 4 chapters with no waffling or excuses made for Sirius. If James and the others oust him for his attempt to use Remus as a murder weapon and this causes personal growth on his behalf, that would be brilliant. Or that, in combination with him seeing yves truly happy and loved causes him to grow and become a man Yves could end up with... by all means, let that happen. Anyway, can't wait to see what you do with this well-written mess they're all in!

Hope to see some consistency in her love life for a few chapters... best wishes!

Amanda

Author's Response: Hi Amanda

Thank you for your response.
First off, thanks for the compliments. It really means a lot to me that you continued reading even though you found the back and forth frustrating. I know what it's like to be in the readers situation, frustrated by a story. I do find that most times, if you persevere it does all work out in the end.

And thank you for your critique. I do agree with you, I think Yves is more than a little confused but it is a coming of age and she needs to find her salt if that makes any sense, which she will- I have great plans for Yves, she just needs the oppertunity to show what she is really made of. I think that she does show strength, she is still reeling from her trauma with Sirius, but she definately needs to show a lot more resolve. I think perhaps I may need to work on my Sirius characterisation. I don't want him to come across as the villain because in the context of the canon he isn't, he is comprised of antithesis.

I would be sad to lose you as a reader but I would like to thank you again for reading this far and for taking the time to review.


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