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Review:Rumpelstiltskin says:
Hello! Now that I'm finally back, I'm *finally* getting to reviewing challenge entries for grading. (If you prefer your reviews elsewhere, please feel free to message me on the Forums and I can transfer them.)

I feel so badly for Harry. Not only has he already had an extremely tough life, but I can imagine that the aftermath of the war was probably one of the toughest of all (which is what you have exemplified in this piece).

In this predicament, I find it's often helpful for the protagonist to have something to focus on (something to give them that little extra will to live). You've done a good job with this by bringing Harry's affection toward Ginny Weasley into the picture, where he's focused on winning her back.

I particularly enjoyed the scene where he's venting to his dead parents at their grave. It's a sad moment, but it also allows for the reader to gain some insight into what Harry's feeling, which I'm certain will be useful for the rest of the pieces.

As part of a whole, I feel like this will be a strong start and makes a great introduction to the remainder of the companion stories. As a stand-alone story, it's mostly strong enough to stand on its own. Your writing is clear and concise, and I appreciate the job you did with Harry's characterization (especially since you are displaying him in such a grief-filled state).

Overall, I think you've done a good job so far, and I look forward to reading the next section.


Author's Response: Hey Rumpel! Thanks for taking time for the reviews :)

I'm glad you liked the scene where he's at his parents' graves. I thought it was the best way to kind of show where Harry's head was at in this particular moment, and he probably felt like he didn't have a lot of other people he could talk to. Sure, people would listen, but they might not fully understand, y'know?

I'm glad you liked Harry's characterization! He's one of those characters I struggle to write the most, so I'm glad I managed to do an okay job here.

Thanks for the review! ♥

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