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Review:The Justice League says:

This chapter was SO well written!! Everything, from Freddie's jokes to Jenny's not-so-secret crush on Luke to James being a lil b***h, it was just all so in character and there was never a time where I did at least have some idea where the character motivations were! Often times in fanfics, the side character's personalities are muddied in the background, but you do such s good job of giving them all their own disticnt motivations and views! I absolutely LOVE Freddie and how often he calls Jenny out on her crap!

And I'm so interested in what Jenny did to make James so mad! How could he possibly think that she was the reason they broke up? And I love the building mystery of the other two times James corned Jenny to tell her how pretty she was! The way you've managed to emphisize how little the best friends know each other without downright saying it is just incredible!

I can't wait to find out what James's dream was about and I can't wait for the next update!

Author's Response: HI THERE! I always get a shock when I see a penname I don't recognise! Firstly, THANK YOU FOR REVIEWING!

Now to the review -- thank you, thank you, thank you SO much. It's one thing to hear it from your dad, but to have a complete stranger like my writing is just ... i'm just very happy lol. Honestly, thank you.

Freddie, Luke, James and Dom are SO important to this story, they're as integral as Jenny and if I EVER let them got to the wayside, please smack me. But I'm so so happy with this? "there was never a time where I didn't at least have some idea where the character motivations were" ! YAY!

This story is pinnacled on each individual character's motivation, as I'm sure you can tell, and without it, there would be no story at all. Their thoughts are central to the choices they make, which are WILDLY different to Jenelle's. And also HECK YES FREDDIE!!! He is much too perceptive for his own good ... and Jenny needs a good BS checker.

I KNOW!? What on earth is James thinking?! He is clearly incapable of staying away from her (i.e. the FOUR times he's tried to stick it on her). Is James' dream, bad as it was, a sudden driving force to the kiss? Maybe so... And eek! It's so important for me not to just spell everything out, because that wouldn't make for a good story, and actually let actions and conversations hint and glint at how little these "best friends" get each other. And when do first POV narrators EVER have that much insight into themselves let alone anyone else? As the narrator and the only POV, we have to assume she's unreliable because all she sees is what she wants to and all she thinks is based on what she sees.

James' dream may take a couple more chapters, not gonna lie haha, and it may never EVER be fully explained (hint: it was VERY bad).

Next chapter is hopefully coming very soon! I'm kind of a lightning quick updater hahaha. CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT YOU THINK!!! So so so much happens in the next two chapters.


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