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Review:IrisAya says:
[Comment 1/?]

So, Iíve been following this from when you posted the first chapter. Iíve been meaning to comment before this, particularly before this newest chapter was posted. The main thing thatís kept me from it is that Iíve been quite ill. So, this might combine all comments for the chapters into one, I apologize in advance for the huge comment that will inevitably come (because Iím too lazy to split it up, partly because the later chapters have obviously changed parts of comments.)

Chapter 1ish:

I generally donít start reading fics before there is at least a few chapters updated consistently, but I saw the topic and had to read it to see if I wanted to follow it. I absolutely understand what Nauticaís going through, not the same thing, but the end of December 2016, I was suddenly diagnosed with something awful.

In comparison to Nautica, the only possible treatment for my condition, period, was two major operations. Though, the nature of the surgeries required sections of my hair to need to be shaved for the incisions etc. The doctors and surgeons obviously saw my horror (like Nautica I LOVE my hair) and made sure to reassure, multiple times, that it wouldnít be a long-lasting issue and it would grow back.

For the next month, my main concern was ďWhat is going to happen to my hair?Ē and a bit of outrage when it happened. I couldnít bring myself to look at the damage to my hair when I had the first surgery a month later (and my mum further destroyed my hair because she apparently doesnít know how to handle hair other than pin-straight hair.). I feel Nautica on the topic SO much, Iím not a teen anymore, particularly when it first happened, so I canít even IMAGINE how poorly I would have reacted if I had been a teen! Though I do hope sheíll hit the point where she no longer cares much about it, in the weight of the other symptoms that are getting serious.

Chapter 2ish:

I kind of enjoy that sheís hard on James, Freddy, and Jeremiah knowing that other prefects/etc. will let things slide. But thatís probably just the kind of person I am.

Actually when this chapter came out, I thought Jamesí comment was related to the rumor that Nautica had resigned, and that he believed the rumors. It was this quote:
"Come on, Pheonix," James says, a twinkle in his eye as he steps forward slyly. "We're just having a bit of fun: you can understand that, yeah?"

It made me think of a few possible reasons circulating for her resignation from Captaincy.

Though, I was a bit worried about Nautica when they disappeared because you mentioned flying/hitting the outer wall. I was worried, until the next section, that sheíd end up being hurt from the incident. At least that didnít seem to happen. Apparently by this point Iíd already become rather attached to Nautica.

Though I donít quite relate on the not telling her friends, not that I blame her at all. My friends and coworkers know that Iíve had health issues for years and the diagnosis suddenly explained a ton of things. So Iím used to my body failing me, to a certain extent. But I can emphasize with her considering her body hasnít ever and how jarring that would be. At this point, Iíd hoped that her friends would find out soon, because it can be super lonely and itís good to have people around you that can understand why you may be acting oddly or snappishly.

Final comment on that chapter, I kind of love Freddy, just his personality I guess.

Chapter 3ish:

Oh man, disgusting medicine, I feel for you Nautica. Hopefully it works in the long-run though!

"Why do you keep asking?"

Oh yes, Freddy why do you keep asking?

Iím kind of curious as to what is causing Nautica to faint. I wonder if itís a side-effect of the potion or something like that. Either way, not enjoyable in any way, especially if it happens often.

At the same time, I understand why James woke Nautica up, but at the same time Iím annoyed (with Nautica) at him for doing it. Especially because sheís obviously there for a legitimate reason.

Of course, my previous thought about James believing the rumor that sheíd resigned and possibly reasons behind it were proven false here, but it was also nice.

With his honestly about the bludger incident (blaming himself) and why he does silly pranks (and that question about the statue), thatís when I began to get an image (on my earlier hunch from Freddy) that James had liked her for at least a bit. I also liked, a bit, how Nautica honestly thought on him enough to really decide if she had hated him, truly, and a possible reason why.

I can only imagine (with my idea of his feelings and having now read this chapter) how James will react when he finds out the true reason sheís in the Hospital Wing and resigned.

Re: losing hair, see above also. Once again, I feel totally in-line with Nautica on this. I basically lost it when I first take a full look at my hair post-surgeries.

I canít blame Nautica for snapping when the bucket of blue goop fell on them, I would too. Iím imagining Jamesí and Freddyís faces and Iím laughing to myself about it. I wonder who it was meant for, though, and a bit wow on Jeremiah still laughing when it wasnít even meant for them!

Chapter 4ish:

At least it hasnít gotten worse, I mean itís not great that the mass hasnít improved, but frankly with something like this, no news is sometimes good news still.

Iím happy sheís still able to be a prefect, but I canít help but wonder how long itíll last. Especially with her mental list of symptoms :/

I enjoyed this chapter particularly, because Nautica showed signs of being able to move past the panic-mode of a new diagnosis and think things through a bit more. I loved the Co-Captain idea and enjoyed her playfulness with James after she spoke to Tessla about Co-Captaining.

Author's Response: Hey there. So real quick, I am writing this on my phone. I'd use my lab top but haven't had a chance with a new puppy in the house. But I want to say thank you for all of your feedback. I'm sorry to hear about your own health issues. I haven't had any like Nautica is going through; however, I do have my own health problems. I think this story is a more serious version of what I've gone through.
I've made Nautica to be a very selfless person on most fronts. She doesn't like to burden people, and from what I've shown of her parents, I hope you can see why. If her emotions seem to be dipping back and forth, I feel that that would be more realistic. I know I've struggled many times with what I'm feeling from day to day. I have sort of an outline on where I want to take this story and I hope that if there's ever anything that doesn't seem right or should be changed that you'd let me know. But again, I really do appreciate that you've taken the time to follow Nautica on this journey. :)


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