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Review:Rosie_Posie says:
Hey!

I just read all 5 chapters in a row and I have to say I love how you are developing Alice, then Emma and adding in James slowly. It is nice to see her life develop and what "normal" is before going into a love interest route - which is where I assume Alice & James will go.

Also it is refreshing to have someone like Alice who is clearly introverted and suffers from anxiety as a main character, often OCs are funny/outgoing/sassy/awkward yet also confident rather than Alice who is also, funny and sassy and awkward, but in a different way, if that makes sense?

One note at the start you said "Her dark green robes shimmered as they caught the morning sunlight." I might be wrong but I remember Emma having blue eyes?

Hope you update again soon,
RP xx

Author's Response: Hey Rosie_Posie!

I am so happy you like how the story is developing! Sometimes I think I have trouble developing stories/characters smoothly, so it's great that you think Strained is doing well!

I believe Alice is a refreshing character too, to be honest. I don't think I've read any fanfiction where anxiety is portrayed realistically, perhaps because most don't experience it or don't think it's relevant. Either way, anxiety is hard to explain to people who don't experience it as is, so ~conveying~ what anxiety feels like in writing is even more difficult, I think. And yes, I totally know what you mean, haha! I think many OCs are very one-dimensional in their moods/actions, which is just unrealistic--people can be funny/sassy/outgoing/confident in certain situations and truly shy/awkward/uncomfortable in others, and it doesn't mean that it changes anything about who they are as people (slightly random but as Whitman said: "I am large, I contain multitudes"). Also, unlike in fanfiction, I don't believe people are generally ~confident~ in their awkwardness, either.

Also, yes, Emma does have blue eyes! However, I did mean her robes were green, as in robes that they have to wear for work :) Thank you for paying attention to that, though!

Thank you so much for your review RP, I really appreciate it. I will update ASAP!

Sofia xxx


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