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Review:nott theodore says:
CTF Jailbreak Review

Hello! I've not read any of your stories before but I'm glad that I get a chance to now. I've seen quite a few stories around in which the Malfoys have another child, or a child who isn't Scorpius, but I don't think I've read any of them, so this was quite a nice introduction.

Lyra has a really strong voice so far. She's very believable as a teenager, she's very sarcastic and a bit dramatic, which I think fits in quite well with someone of her age.

I really enjoyed the dialogue and the interaction between Scorpius and Lyra here too, especially since you've created a character who doesn't exist in canon. I think you captured the sibling relationship here really well, and I could sense their parents frustration with them bickering. I like the fact that you've set out some of the relationships that we're going to encounter in this story already (I love Scorpius and Albus being together!) and that we got some real background to the character and her time at Hogwarts so far.

The only CC I have for you is that I did spot a couple of typos in this chapter - it might be worth going through and just correcting those so it reads smoother. But I really enjoyed this!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Oh hello, finally getting to your lovely review after about a month, so sorry about that!

First of, thank you so much for coming to review. I'm really glad that you think Lyra is believable, sometimes I get a little worried that Lyra becomes too much.

Awww thank you.

I just had to add Scorbus in. It's my kryptonite, and I love it with all of my heart. I could be in the middle of the most epic battle in history, and if some random person from the side was just like 'hey, Scorbus is canon now' or 'X Scorbus fanfic has been updated', I'd just like drop my weapons and prance of the battlefield.

Thanks for pointing out the typos. My plan is to finish GTOLM and then edit the whole thing before I start posting the sequel.

Thanks again for reviewing! Hope to see you creeping around my AP soon.


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