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Review:crimson quill says:
Capture the Flag

So, I thought your main character, Lyra is so strong like she's got such a clear voice and she's crazy but I totally love this! It was really strong opening chapter because you've give any information without over loading the reader but also got my interest/attention.

I think Lyra is so believeable as a teenager, she's got a great inner monologue which is really fun. I love that albus and scorpius are together, I do love a bit of scorbus, no lie. they're beyond fluffy here too. Another thing I love about this! I've been writing too much angst recently!

So, your relationships are so great already. I'm totally enjoying the banter between the siblings. it's believable and engaging for it. it sounds like conversations I might have had with my brother when we were younger. I really like the relationships with her family which seems to be really strong and loving, it's nice.

I like that you had Lyra going off and talking about one subject like her friends then coming back to present. I imagine she is a bit scatty by the way you use her inner monologue here. I'm very interested but Lyra is going to be getting up to in this story! good job at developing some strong and promising chapters within this chapter! ;D XX

Author's Response: Oh my gosh I'm so sorry, it has been an eternity!

First of all thank you so much for reviewing, I really appreciate it. I'm really glad that you like Lyra so much, as she really is the face of the novel. I really love her, and I'm glad you do too.

I love Scorbus as well. Believe it or not, in the beginning Scorpius was with Rose, as I thought that he friends TJ and Ben rounded out the rainbow enough, but then I thought it would be fun to show the different parallels within gay relationships as they're not all the same.

I'm going to have to go creep up on your ap and read some of that angsty stuff.

I'm really glad is really all that I've been saying in this review, but I honestly am. I actually don't know how I got the banter so accurate (it seems to be the thing people comment on the most), because my older half-sister is much older and never really lived with me, so we never fought as much as traditional siblings do.

Lyra is a character who gets distracted a lot, so I'm glad that was clear, because some people find her a bit too rambley, and it's hard to explain that she eventually grows out of it without spoiling the story.

Anyways, thanks so much again for such a sweet review! I hope to reply to one of your reviews again soon.

Have a lovely day!


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