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Review:nott theodore says:
CTF Jailbreak Review

Hi!

Wow, this was a really powerful and effective start to the story! I'm not sure what I was expecting when I began reading this, but for a prologue you've done an incredible job, because I'm definitely hooked as it is and I really want to read on and find out what's going to happen next.

Also, I have to say that you have done something that is pretty rare in stories like this one - you've actually made me feel sorry for Lucius Malfoy. Draco is a character I have more sympathy with, given that he's younger when all of this begins, but Lucius is usually another matter entirely. Still, seeing him suffer so much and being clearly so terrified - not only of what Voldemort was going to do to him, but what he was going to do to his family - actually made me feel sorry for him.

Your characterisation of Voldemort was spot on in this. I don't think that he's an easy character to write, but you captured him perfectly - every single action of his, every time he moved, just felt so sinister and menacing. He had such a power in this prologue and it's easy to see why so many people are afraid of him and how he imposes his will on so many. That last line was great as well - it fits brilliantly with his character and was really chilling!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Toward the end, after Voldemort returns, I felt a lot of sympathy for Lucius. It's easy to be ruthless and stand behind ideals the first time around when you're winning the war. It's easy to be cruel and support your master while you're waiting for him to come back. It's an entirely different thing 20 years later when you have a family and said master is known for taking his rage for you out on those you care for. Lucius is no longer the young Death Eater with only himself to worry about. He has so much more to lose and it took him too long to realize it.

He IS hard! It took a while to get all this right! I was very nervous posting this when I first started, but I'm glad it comes across okay.

Thanks for visiting!
-Liz


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