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Review:ANightingaleInAGoldenCage says:
Here for CTF!

You fell right in the middle of it with it dind't you? I do like it though, seeing a character distraught right away and only later on findin gout what exactly happened, while also finding out things about her character and those around her anyway. I also like that you use descriptions other characters have of others too, like that Mia calls Cash grumpy and Cash calls herself a realist. it makes it all the more gripping and real and even more like a real friendship.
I do get the feeling that Lettie is a tiny bit dramatic though. But then again, she does come off as a complete teenager, embarrassement and obsessions included, and considering it's been a while since I was that age, it seems really well done regardless.
I also love the fact that you made Louis and Dominique twins, because it's not something I see quite often. The differences between the two are obviously highlighted too and I love the fact that she's actually trying to help and tries not to get them go to Louis, even though she didn't manage to stop them in the end. It seems like shes a character everyone wants to be friends with, which also fits with her popularity, and it's a very nice touch to see that people can be popular and not be cruel (cause sometimes they absolutely are). Well done!

Author's Response: Hey!

It does go straight into the action which might be a bit unusual without too much build up but a lot of the story is told through flashbacks which fills in the blanks of what has come before.

I'm glad you picked up on the girls friendship, it's something that I really wanted to present well. It's obviously a romance but the friendship aspect was really important for me to get right and highlight!

Lettie is totally a drama queen, at this point in the story she's basically a fairy princess. she's a total idealist/dreamer/romantic but that's just her nature. the events of this story help her develop as a person. I'm really pleased you enjoyed her characterisation.

honestly, I made Louis/Dom for twins for a reason but I can't really remember why, something to do with their ages. I think I wanted Dom to be in the same year as Lettie or something. I know Dom is older in canon but it's artistic licence or something. Dom is a nice character, she's got pretty pure intentions. :)

It was lovely to receive your ctf review, lucky me! xo

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