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Review:Lady Asphodel says:
This chapter was so amazing! Just from the description alone and the way how you write it.. it's like a self-monologue but in narration - which you did incredible with its delivery. I love how you described the scene that Chloe is in. I can see it so perfectly. I think that Chapter Image helps, but still - you set the tone clearly. I love practically every description of this - from the way how you described the cold, the height of the church, the distance from how far she can see it and the people who walks toward it. Then the feeling of sadness and anxiety due to the loss of James and Lily and Marlene.

It's so sad to know that Chloe's mother is suffering what it seems to be Alzheimerís. I know personally what that is like and it's a difficult situation for anyone.

The scene where she reads Sirius' letter was definitely chilling. I like how you described what the letter looked like. Giving more to the dark tone of the story. It was short and straight to the point but definitely sad. And it's sad that she had to keep from her mother - and keeping up pretenses.

I've grown to like Marauder era stories, but I never really took the time to seek out and read it personally. But I'm glad I gotten the chance to read this. This is very interesting and I'll add this to my reading list.

Very incredible writing! Good job!

CTF (Gryffindor)

- LA

Author's Response: Hello!

Thank you so much for leaving a review. This is my first instance of including an introduction/first chapter that goes out of chronological order and I think it works well here. I really wanted people to know that this is going to be an AU story (exactly how much I diverge remains to be seen) and so little hints here and there, like Marlene dying after Lily and James, and Sirius not being in Azkaban yet, were important. I hope they served well to pull the reader in!

Ugh, yes, the Alzheimer's is not going to be fun to write about. It runs in my family and is a really difficult subject, but it just seemed like something I had to include here.

The letter from Sirius says so much about their relationship at this point. I won't give too much away, but it's curt, and harsh, and without thought as to how this kind of news would devastate Chloe. And that's all I'll say right now ;)

I'm glad I've won you over to a Marauders-era fic! I've started (and not finished) two before this, and I think it was my decision to diverge from canon that makes this story seem more doable. I hope you stick around!

Thanks so much ♥

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