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Review:melian says:
That was really interesting!

First of all I want to talk about characterisation. I thought you did a really good job of showing peopleís personalities with only minimal description. For example, we donít see much of Emily, but I have a solid idea of what sheís like. Equally Marlene Ė and can I say I loved the description of her being pretty in a cunning sort of way. Iíve never heard that before but it makes a lot of sense. I liked too the comparison of her teeth to Emilyís. Itís small, but it felt significant.

Also, the Marauders. This was clearly set just after a full moon. I liked how you said Remus had always been sickly Ė something that would make sense to a person in that year group as he was always in and out of the hospital wing. Peterís notes always having crumbs on them was another nice touch. Iím curious about the relationship Ė or lack thereof- between Sirius and Marlene too. Clearly he wants to take it further. I wonder, with all her capabilities, if she will let him.

Iím also very intrigued by the Black Adder Society. Iíve not read many Marauder fics that have any sort of organisation other than Death Eaters and the Order of the Phoenix. This, though, coupled with Michael Flint having the run of the school, is pretty thought-provoking. And the black dahlia warning too Ö without any knowledge of floriogaphy it made me think of a spy novel I read yonks ago that talked about a person called the Black Dahlia. If it means a warning, that makes perfect sense. So thanks for htat!

All in all a most interesting chapter. Well done!

Cheers Mel

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