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Review:Dojh167 says:
Hufflepuff CtF Review

Iím coming into this without having read anything else in the Making It universe (as far as I recall), which explains why the story summary left me with no idea what this was about =P

Your description here is excellent. We donít know anything about your main character (at least those of us who arenít familiar with the rest of your universe), but your description grounds us very well in the moment, and also tells us a lot about your main character through how she acts and feels about that without you having to spell anything out.

I love the line ďinstead of flying, I was falling. Instead of magic it was science.Ē It has a really clever rhythm to it.

Okay, weíre following Molly! Not sure if I missed that in the chapter description or something, but now Iím caught up. I had correctly assumed from the narrative that the protagonist was female, so I was at least that far.

Christopher is awfully confident, diagnosing and mending a broken wrist on his own. I suppose as a quidditch captain he may see them more regularly than other students would.

So far this is really cute, though the story title certainly makes me wonder if it will stay that way!

You list this as a short story collection, so Iím not sure what to expect from it overall. The story summary makes it sound like it will all be about Molly and Christopher, but since I donít have the context from other stores Iím not sure how long they were together. I am certainly interested in coming back for more here, but also your other stories - choices, choices!

Well done, you hooked me!


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