Hi Sam, here for CTF.
Man, I really need to read more F/F. And here is a great place to start with that project.
I really enjoyed this first chapter. It was so beautifully written. The way that you described Hannah's emotions, everything that she was feeling upon seeing Susan again, was really moving. To me, it was almost a little bit melancholy, because it had been so long since they had seen each other and the whole chapter had a sort of quietness to it.
It was interesting that Hannah's new feelings for Susan were, well, new, because the way Hannah described Susan gave me such a vibe of familiarity. I mean, obviously they were friends at Hogwarts, so there's that element to it, but the tone here just sort of made me wonder whether Hannah had had feelings for Susan while they were at Hogwarts and had been repressing it. Or maybe I'm reading too much into it :P
Either way I thought this was totally gorgeous, and the way you described the scene really got at how all-consuming seeing Susan again and feeling these new things for her was for Hannah. That's best exemplified by the line about Susan's voice being soft, yet resonating through every cell of Hannah's body. Another great example is "There is a light in her eyes that keeps me searching – it is buried deep inside, beyond twists and turns, but it is there and it is glowing for me."
Again, I really enjoyed this and (assuming this isn't the flag story :P) I'll definitely be back sometime to read more!
Author's Response: Ack, I didnÃ¢Â€Â™t respond to you on here or on hpft? For shame!
I like that you said that the emotions in this chapter almost felt melancholy in a way. I am not sure that I intended that exactly, but I did intent for it to be a complicated mix of emotions. When you have an encounter so meaningful, you donÃ¢Â€Â™t feel just one thing. I think one of the aspects that I was going for, was that sudden realization that they had both been missing out on something in their lives by not having each other in their lives during those years, so yes, melancholy does fit in a way. There is also another layer of why Hannah may be feeling that way, but thatÃ¢Â€Â™s kinda a spoiler for the next chapter.
I donÃ¢Â€Â™t think youÃ¢Â€Â™re reading too much into it. I think Hannah had feelings for Susan, but hadnÃ¢Â€Â™t quite had the words for them. At the time she thought they were just close friends, but with maturity and feeling the force of those feelings again after time apart, Hannah realizes what they really are. I donÃ¢Â€Â™t think Hannah was ever really repressed sexually, she just hadnÃ¢Â€Â™t always considered all of her possibilities.
Thank you very much for the lovely and thoughtful review!