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Review:krazyboutharryginny says:
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Aw, this was absolutely lovely. Poor James, he was so flustered trying to figure out how to respond to Lily complimenting him and showing him goodwill. That was very believable to me because my impression of him was that he thought of himself as being quite a bit more suave than he actually was, and honestly that other people had that impression too, but that in reality he was a bit of a dork. So I really loved that you wrote him totally unsure of what to say and tripping over himself a bit.

I must admit that I was surprised when she said that she felt the same way and the two of them kissed. So I'm really glad you had that second section from her point of view, explaining that she's liked him for a while and her pride and fear of rejection were why she kept acting like she didn't like him.

Having that explanation/understanding made the final scene between them so adorable and, like Lily said, magical. Actually Lily's section was my favourite because it was just lovely. I loved the scene with her dancing with her friends, and also how she was sitting in front of the mirror and seeing herself totally differently. You did a great job of communicating how giddy and happy she was feeling and it made me feel happy too :)

I really enjoyed this, well done!

-Kayla

Author's Response: Hey, Kayla! :D

Ahahah! I always loved to imagine James as a bit of a dork. :P So glad you liked him being so unsure and awkward, I think he's so adorable... :P

I understand that it came a bit unexpected and strange, but I'm glad that it worked with the explaination of Lily's feelings in the second section. I'm so happy you liked her POV and that it made you feel happy! :D

Thank you for another lovely review!
Chiara


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