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Review:krazyboutharryginny says:
Hi, jailbreaking for CTF.

Full disclosure: Sirius/OC stories are something I usually avoid. But I was honestly roped into this by the end of the first paragraph. Your writing is amazing! The scene laid out in that first paragraph is so vivid and the way you described it was so poetic.

And I just got more and more interested as I read on. You did a really fantastic job of giving us enough details to give us an idea of what Chloe's life is like and what's going on around her, while leaving out enough stuff that we were left curious and wanting to know more.

For example, it's fairly clear quite early on that Chloe's mum is suffering from memory loss, Alzheimers or something - but then we're actually introduced to her and we get this additional element that she seems to be very uncomfortable with Chloe's magicial abilities, opening up all sorts of questions about Chloe's background and family life. I thought that was really well done.

The scene where Chloe cracked the egg in the pan and the sound made her think about James and Lily was also very well done; super visceral. And then I liked (well, liked is a strange word here, but) the scene where Chloe found out about Marlene's death, and the difference between her feelings there and her feelings about James and Lily. I think you did a great job describing her shock and grief.

And then that last sentence! What?! What a great cliffhanger. Ugh, I honestly want to read more now but I have to keep jailbreaking for CTF XD Maybe I'll be back sometime!

Great work!

-Kayla

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