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Review:Dojh167 says:
Hufflepuff CtF jailbreak review

Omg this story is so confusing to my feelings. I want to be sad because poor Remus and Tonks are dying, but also there is an incredible sweetness about it. It’s a really fine balance that you’ve done well.

So much death in Remus’ life. Way too much. Make it stop. No, not with his death!

In “seeing passed it to who I was” “passed” should be “past”

The line “Perhaps I should have kept up duelling practice. Hindsight is a wonderful thing.” absolutely destroys me.

I’m confused by the line “Then it became time to step up and perfect them.” What is he supposed to perfect. Oh, or did you mean to say “protect them?”

I think you did a good job characterizing Remus. He seems very solidly in character. Most of what we see her is stuff that we know from canon, and you’ve shown it through Remus’ eyes. I think you did a particularly good job tying Remus’ implied depression and self loathing in, and how that is a consistent force throughout his life.

My favorite part is the ending, when you switch to the present tense. That change makes the story feel very grounded in the moment, and the change from memory to the present moment of death is striking and significant.

Good job with this one ♥


Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review and apologies for the delay in replying.
I have seen the typos but just not had a chance to go and edit!!
I think that seems to be an overlying 'theme' of Remus' character and the song seemed to suit it so well. And I thought he would be feeling so mixed at this point- reunion with his friends but leaving his family!!! Bless him.
Thank you so much again xx

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