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Review:melian says:
Iím glad you put that explanation in the postscript about it being AU, because my canon nerd was itching all the way through this. Marlene dying after Lily and James; Sirius not being in Azkaban in December 1981 Ö But itís AU, so Iíll forgive you.

Having said that, Iím strictly a canon girl, so any foray into AU feels slightly weird to me. So bear with me if I miss things or have trouble with anything.

This is an interesting look at the life of an Order member after the fall of Voldemort. Thereís a bit of PTSD in there, isnít there? The not eating, hiding away, not wanting to talk to anyone. I assume Chloe is a Muggle-born, from the discussion about the sheep fence Ö so thatís something else she needs to deal with Ė parents and friends who donít understand her world and what sheís been going through, so that sense of isolation would be tenfold. Geez. Poor thing. It sounds like she was living in Godricís Hollow, or frequented it, prior to October 1981, so she canít even go home there because itís been blown up. Too many memories. Too much trauma. I donít blame her for not going back.

There were some really nice details in here too. The number of lies she told her mother. The detail of the heating spell that sheíd only put on herself, not the whole house. The yearning to use magic in a Muggle house. It was all done really well.

And Ö that ending! I donít think I need to say more. All I can add is that I hope thereís an explanation, one that would make sense of someone like Sirius using an Unforgivable on Marlene McKinnon.

Geez. Iím still in shock.

Well done.

Cheers Mel

Author's Response: Hahaha, I'm sure as someone who followed canon so wonderfully in their own story, this fic might be unnerving for you! Personally I'd rather use fanfiction to explore what could have happened than adhering to the rules. Thank you for taking the time to read, though.

You're totally right about the PTSD. We hear so much about the Order and how they were heroes, but they were like any other soldiers battling, and dealt with seeing their friends die and--in many cases--having to kill others. JKR set the story up pretty nicely for being the "good guys" and the "bad guys," but it's rarely so black and white in real life. Chloe is a member of the Order who also doesn't want to be involved in the war, but unfortunately allowed herself to be goaded into it by a friend she admired, and is now alienated in both worlds.

Hehehe, the ending is pretty awful, but I am getting such a kick out of seeing everyone's reactions. Now we only have to wait 15+ chapters before finding out, wow!

Thanks again ♥

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