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Review:SunshineDaisies says:
Hiya! I'm here for Hufflepuff CTF!

I'm so pleased I found this story! I love Lily and James, they're my ultimate OTP, so getting to read and review this is such a treat! I love the idea for this story. Seeing little glimpses of their life and relationship rather than an entire epic saga is a nice change of pace for me.

I love that this is where you started off! I think that quite often, Lily/James stories start off with having Lily hating James, but it kind of makes for an unnecessarily long story. I think starting off when they're starting to get along makes for a much more interesting story. I also love this particular scene! Lily often gets portrayed as stuffy goody-two-shoes who never has any fun, so watching her let Sirius and Peter go was nice. I have a suspicion that she might have done so partially to impress James, which makes me all warm and fuzzy on the inside :)

You've done a really good job of characterization here, which is impressive considering how short the chapter is. I love your description of Lily's tangled hair, it definitely gives the impression that she usually doesn't care about that sort of thing, which makes it all the more powerful that she's putting effort into her appearance for James. We didn't get a huge glimpse of their characters here, but I think so far, you're doing an excellent job of writing them accurately, and I'm SO picky about Lily.

Excellent job! I hope I get to review this more!

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