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Review:my_voice_rising says:
Hi there!

I've just binge-read this story today and am so excited that I did. Congratulations on all of your Dobby Awards, by the way--I see that it won Best Post-Hogwarts and that only makes me more interested to see where this goes!

Seth is such a likable character; all of your characters are very rich. Sam and Tarquin are two of my favorites, and I enjoyed reading about the Woodleys' interactions and particularly the grandmother's, as cringe-worthy as they are.

Katie is the erratic, funny best friend but she still has depth and doesn't seem to only be there as a sounding board for Seth to talk about her troubles. I would definitely like to know more about her (particularly her family, since we spend so much time hearing about the Woodleys) so that she becomes a little more three-dimensional. But she has some great one-liners and I like her distaste for Tarquin, who is clearly smitten with her.

Albus's flirtation with Seth is interesting because this story is clearly marked as a James/OC, and the whole mystery of why James is not showing up to tutoring, etc. is great. I feel like he got out of their first detention by using the Invisibility Cloak and bribing/blackmailing the Head Boy, which would be interesting because then it would have been James saying "I'm sorry," which seems unlike him.


In fact, there are so many side-plots to this story and I really appreciate that it's about more than just romance. Sam being to one to steal the pregnancy test potions is another interesting side-plot. I also like how you've added in little changes in Hogwarts with the next generation, like the beginning of term dance and parents coming for Quidditch matches (or maybe I'm totally spacing and that was in the books.)

My only critique would be some editing in terms of sentence structure, and general tidying, but the story and characters are very rich and I can definitely see why this story won so many awards.

I haven't actually read this chapter yet--I wanted to be sure that I took the time to stop and review. So off I go to read! ♥

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this lovely feedback! I'm glad you enjoy the Story line and also the characters... I try to write thme in a way that seems plausible and realistic, both main characters and supporting cast ;). Flat side-kicks only make for flat protagonists :)

I'm really happy you enjoy the side-plots and General twists to the Story... I really wanted to make it as multi-faceted as possible but I also promise that everything is going to tie together nicely in the end :)

I know that especially older chapters need some tidying up but since I struggle to find the time to finish new chapters I might do that when the story is finished, I guess :) But thanks for letting me know!!!

Thank you so so so much again for this amazing review and for reading, I hope you've enjoyed the chapter and that you come back for the next :)


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