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Review:SilverMoonFairy says:
BvBe-e-e-e- TAG! *salute*

This chapter was fraught with tension at what Teddy would do in retaliation. Your short sentences kept the tension high and kept the story moving and I sort of adore Vic's inner monologue, but wow, what a mouth on her! Or... An inner mouth... In her head. Yeah, let's go with that...

I do have a concern about WHY DOES SHE KNOW THE KILLING CURSE AND WHAT WILL BE THE REPRECUSSIONS OF HER REPEATEDLY USING IT?! I mean, sheesh! She's what, 15? 16? Still in school? KILLING SPIDERS WILLY NILLY?! WHAT IN THE ACTUAL- Okay, I'm calm now. But I am wondering about that, if the Ministry is about to be bearing down on her or something- it's call an Unforgivable Curse for a reason and she's under age, so she has the trace on her. I think personally, I would have used 'reducto' and then repaired the bathroom. Maybe 'immobulus' to stop them from moving...

I would also like to add- what a foul trick to play! She HURT herself. Her KNEES are BLEEDING. Teddy just got a bad taste in his mouth. And those poor gnomes...

Okay, okay. Wonderful chapter, looking forward to the next. One little technical before I go:

do thy know it's my bedroom?!
The 'thy' should be 'they.'

Toodles!
-Liz

Author's Response: Hi, thanks for the review :)

Excuse me for my huge plot hole in this chapter, I always seem to have one ^_^ I think Avada Kedavra is much more serious if it's used on a person, I don't remember JKR saying anything about it being used on animals. I'm imagining the rules to be somewhat like the Muggle world: you don't get sent to prison for murdering spiders (because, let's be honest, most of us have probably all killed a spider before). Yes, Victoire still has the Trace on her, but the Ministry is pretty rubbish at knowing WHO has done the magic in a house, which was proven in the books. So...yeah. That is my (not so convincing) excuse ;)

And I write all my stories on my phone with messed up autocorrect, so yeah, you might come across a few typos. But anyway! Once again, thank you for reviewing, I'm glad you liked the chapter :D


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