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Review:dreamgazer220 says:
Hello my dear! I'm here with your review ♥

Thanks for coming back to request because this story is really starting to grow on me. It's such a quick read and Lyra's narration is hilarious. She really acts like a teenager, which is hard to write; sometimes teenagers come across as older and more mature in fics or in TV, but you do a great job of keeping her true to her age.

OMG, I can't believe Ben pushed her out the window! What a jerk. I can't wait to see the aftermath of that and if/how it'll effect their future friendship, although I don't think it's a grudge that Lyra will hold for long.

Also, I loved the banter with Albus and arguing over Scorpius. I have a feeling though that Albus really does care about her.

Speaking of which, it was refreshing to see Draco and Astoria referred to as "Mum" and "Dad" instead of a typical Mother and Father. It spoke volumes about their relationship and their upbringing, and I'm glad that they were all there at the courtroom for her. ♥

Also, I hope we get to meet TJ! He sounds like an interesting character. And this line made me LOL: Okay, so you guys donít want to sit through a horrible court story, so instead Iíll tell you about Benís boyfriend, like I promised. I don't know why but it was just perfect.

In terms of CC, I don't have much that I didn't mention in my previous review, but more descriptions (even if they're quick) would be good. Also, here: ďJust checking up on my soon to be sister in-law.Ē He says. I think you can have a comma separating the "sister-in-law," and the "he says", like that. If that makes sense. But that's just a nit-picky thing. XD

Otherwise, you're doing a great job with this and as I mentioned, I'm really starting to enjoy Lyra's character and her narration.

Thanks for the request!

♥Jill

Author's Response: Hey Jill, you're welcome and thanks for getting here so quick with that review!

Well, I myself am a teenager, so I think that's why. Normally adults create teenaged characters, so they've kind of lost touch with what it's like to be Lyra's age.

Yeah, they're definitely a very happy friendly family!

They were however all at the house. Only her father came to get her.

Oh you do, he's a good friend of Lyra's!

Thank you, and you're welcome!

Thanks again Jill,

-Lily


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