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Review:blackballet says:
Hello there! I’m here for B v B on the forums!

I really enjoyed this story, and it seems very original even though I haven't read many Teddy/Victoire stories. I really appreciated Victoire's characterization because it is very distinct. The audience will always be able to identify her. Congrats on creating such a strong character!

There were just a few things that stuck out to me. I find it a bit strange that she says “Oh yeah, I forgot to mention…” only because the reader has never before been addressed by Victoire. It might make more sense if you just said “Today is my birthday,” or something along those lines.
Also, every time you end dialogue with an exclamation point or question mark, there doesn’t need to be a comma afterwards as well. Just something small to refine your writing.

Other than that, I really enjoyed this as a first chapter!
Keep up the good work,

blackballet

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed the story so far :) To be honest, I had no idea I was turning Victoire into such a strong character but I'm fine with what I've created ;) As for my punctuation, I guess I still have a lot to learn :P Thanks for pointing it out though, I'll make sure not to add comas after question marks in the future

Once again, thank you for reviewing! :)


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