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Review:Freda_and_Georgina says:
Hello! Georgina here intrigued by your story.

I felt like reading a Fantastic Beasts era and saw this one with no reviews on it! Of course we must change that so here I am.

First off, very good introduction to the problem. My first thought was Peeves (or just any poltergeist) since I believe in the books he can make himself invisible, but that doesn't seem to be the case. I did appreciate the general realness of this chapter (suspending the disbelief in magical events, of course). It overall seemed very relatable and I'm excited as to where you'll go next.

That all being said, I would like to point out that there were certain portions that were rather confusing. This could be a combination of my impatient reading style and the fact that this is just an intro chapter, but when the school went into confusion I myself sort of lost track of who we were following. This is especially difficult since I'm not sure who I should be paying attention to once the plot picks up; the voice, the teacher, the old man, the barkeep, who/what? I'm assuming that this will be answered as the actual story picks up, in which case the confusion I had is what I'm supposed to feel as the reader.

Very interested in where you take this next and your portrayal of Newt and American wizarding. It seems to be a good idea you're working on, though a part of me is sad to know after the next movie comes out this will probably no longer be canon. But for now, I don't care.

Hope to see the next chapter soon!
--Georgina

Author's Response: Hi,

thank you so much for your very kind review.

The next chapter is available now and should clear up some of your confusion. Mayhem in an otherwise pervasively strict atmosphere was the intention in the classroom. The barroom scene was added atmosphere for what is coming.

Yes, as the story progresses things should become a little clearer as Newt has a full plate this time (as if he didn't before).

I never thought about this being canon, but all good things must come to an end.

Please read the following chapters and let me know what you think of them. I do take everything in a review into consideration when writing further on a story.

Thanks again,
Evil Otter

BTW-Thanks for the first review, I was becoming a little distressed and thought that no one liked the story.


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