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Review:marauderfan says:
Aw, Lyra really is growing up. She didn't even break Hugo's nose. Instead she used her words. I'm proud of her.

The idea of all these wizards and witches waiting in line to sign the cast of someone they don't really know just because signing a cast is a big deal in a place where they usually have leg-regrowing potions instead of casts... that's hilarious. And also I would expect nothing less from Draco Malfoy than for him to already have the potion. It's extra funny because you just know some kid waited a really long time just to sign Lyra's cast and probably had to sign on top of some other large signature that was taking up too much space, and then it didn't matter anyway because Lyra got the cast off two hours later. Bahahaha.

Can we talk about the fact that Draco has an owl named Romeo. Headcanon: Astoria has one named Juliet.

On a scale of 1 to spatttergroit, how much do you think Draco enjoyed Lyra's response comparing him to Harry Potter? I bet he frowned grumpily and then started re-reading The Fault In Our Stars.

I'm really enjoying this fic so far, though one thing I'd love to see more of would be a bit more scene setting. I feel like it kind of hops from one thing to another pretty quickly and I never feel like I'm entirely in the moment. Maybe take time to describe what things look like, or what Lyra is feeling, or kind of get into her head more so the reader can really understand what makes her tick, as a way to complement all of the dialogue?

It's your story though so you write what you want to write - that's just a bit of CC/personal opinion if you want it. Either way, I'm definitely still enjoying the ride. :) To the next chapter! ♥

Author's Response: I'm proud of her too, she really needed to handle things the prefect way.

I don't even know where I came up with that idea, I just know that as soon as I started writing it I fell in love with it and decided to keep it.

I never even thought of that! Ha ha. But it might interfere with some later events in the story... Hint, hint, hint.

Maybe. But I suppose since Scorpius and Albus are dating they've probably gotten a slightly better relationship. And they work together (something you'll get to see at some point), so.

I've definitely been trying to do that, and I think it's especially improved quite a bit. But it's definitely hard to do, because I feel like with all of the humour and 1st person it gets a bit cluttered and hard to do. But I'm definitely trying!

No, please. I absolutely LOVE CC, how else would any of us get better? I mean really. If it weren't for you guys being like 'that's not right' or 'it's than not then' then where would I be? Especially since I'm not as used to writing in English, be it the fact that it's not my first language.

Lots of love,

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