hi chiara! i'm here from review tag!!
firstly, SECOND PERSON. I live for second person. Like literally live. And you used it so well here! Second person added so well to the beauty of your writing.
secondly, imagery. Straight from the beginning, the imagery is amazing. It makes me fall straight into the story, and I can really see James's love of Lily. (How fitting is it that I'm reviewing your Jily story on Halloween, by the way? /cries) Anyways, your imagery is really what hooked me in. It's absolutely beautiful.
AND AAH THAT WAS SO CUTE!!! The whole build up to their kiss had me on the edge of my seat - like was Lily going to confess? Was she going to walk away? And as soon as they did kiss, of course, I almost cried out in happiness. Even though I know it obviously happens, all kudos to your wonderful writing.
and then you switch perspectives and it's even better, if that's possible. AND THIS LINE OH MAN:
"This morning you were Lily Evans, the bookworm, the ice queen, the haughty and snooty perfect Prefect. Tonight you're Lily Evans, still a queen, but the queen of James Potter's heart."
I'M NOT CRYING, YOU'RE CRYING
This whole story was so sweet and cute and makes me forget that 35 years ago today they died (which is pretty hard to be honest). Let me tell you, I am always here for a smackload of Jily fluff!! This whole story was so well written, I love it so much. Complete 10/10!!
Author's Response: Rikki!!!
Aww... this is so sweet, thank you so much! *wub*
I love second person, I love the insight it gives in the characters' minds. And I'm so, so glad you thought I used it well... *blushing*
Ah, I know... Halloween... :'(
Description is actually something I struggle with a lot, so I'm glad it worked out here and that it helped you being dragged into the story!
Aww... so glad you found them cute! (They totally are, by the way... as you might've guessed, I love Jily!) It's lovely to know your reaction at their kiss! *blushes more and squishes*
I was actually a tiny bit scared about Lily's perspective, so I'm glad you loved it too! And I do like that line. :D Ahahah! Aww, did I make you cry?
I'm so glad you loved the story! And I promise I will get to your request soon (possibly tonight, if I make it in time!)
Thank you so much again for making me smile with your super sweet feedback!