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Review:PaulaTheProkaryote says:
Hello you magnificent being! :D

I'm so very sorry that this is so late! Late seems to be my signature these days!

You were right in guessing that this would be the kind of story I would love! Fluffy sweet Jily is everything I could ever want from life!

I'm the kind of person that either loves second person voice or hates it, but I definitely loved it for this story! It was such an easy read and I didn't have to search around to guess who was speaking. Excellently executed!

The thing that stood out most in this chapter to me was how deliciously multifaceted your characterization of both Lily and James is. These little things like James being a Gryffindor but being scared of heights only when dealing with those cliffs. Ah, that was just such a good bit. The way that of all the things that drew Lily's polite words it was James being heroic but not bragging about it. I really love that. You've just really captured the characters so well here!

"Lily, I..." you swallow. "Merlin, you're beautiful..." I actually squealed at this line. My dogs hate when I read stories that I decide I love. It interrupts their naps.

You've just really taken what could be a mundane first kiss and turn it into something magical. You've taken the well known Jily stereotypes like James unnecessarily professing his feelings without a filter and Lily quickly switching emotions and you've made them feel fresh.

The section on how she's so much more than just beautiful is so near and dear to my heart. I wish every boy realized that and professed it to the girls they care about. It's just so much better to hear how completely and totally amazing she is in his eyes beyond just looks.

I love the self esteem boost she has. That she doesn't see anything truly wrong with herself despite the fact that she can list them off.

The second one is indeed better!

My only cc is that this is not a finished 90 chapter novel for me to crawl inside and live in. That counts.

Author's Response: Hi, Paula!
Ah, no worries... I'm late answering, so we're even! ;) (and this review was so wonderful that it was totally worth the wait!)

Ah, I knew you would like this! :D (actually, no, I didn't, but since you are a fellow Jily shipper I hoped so...)

Personally I love second person. It gives an insight in the characters' psicology that first and third person just can't equal... but I guess it is very tricky, so I'm glad you thought it worked here. :)

Ah, that's great to hear! I'm glad you liked the way I portrayed both James and Lily and that they seemed multifaceted and recognizable! :D I think I quite love the cliff bit too!!!

Ahahah! Poor dogs... :P but I'm glad of your reaction! :D

Ah, yes... every girl would want a boy who appreciated the person they are, and not just their looks... Lily is so lucky! Also, love makes you look beautiful, doesn't it? :)

Erm... I don't think I would ever be able to complete a 90 chapter novel, especially with this tone... by the way, this is the first time that a CC makes me smile wider than the rest of the review!!!

Did I mention that you're awesome? *hug* *wub*
Thank you so much again for this incredibly flattering review!

Lots of love and snowball hug!
Chiara


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