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Review:dreamgazer220 says:
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Hello hello! So I don't normally read James/Lily, but I saw this and figured I'd give it a shot because I'm sometimes a sucker for fluff and first kisses. I'm so glad I did.

This was so adorable! I loved it. And I loved that it was written in second person, I feel like it really helped with the storyline here. I didn't have any problems identifying who was who, and I knew it was James even before you mentioned names. And, I love the song choices :P

I love that he was so transfixed on her eyes. I loved the ways you described them, and it makes sense because everyone always talked about Harry's eyes being his mum's, and here I can see why. I loved how sweet and nervous James was, and that he did something heroic to capture her attention. And I loved that he was afraid of the cliff. It just made him more human and adorable.

And the kiss was so sweet, I'm so glad it was her that did it and pulled him in by his robes! Love.

And then I liked that we got to see Lily here, too, and that you used the lyrics to break up the transitions. I loved seeing her personality shift and that one of the reasons she kept rejecting James was because she wanted to protect herself, afraid that he was playing her. It seems very in character with what we know of them.

Sooo if you couldn't tell, I loved this! Great job!!

♥♥♥
Jill

Author's Response: Jill!!! *wub*
Thank you! So, so, so much!
This review made me so happy! I'm so glad you choose this story and that you enjoyed it, even if it isn't what you would usually read.
(I'm a heavy Jily shipper instead... but I believe you guessed that much...)

So glad you liked the way I wrote both James and Lily and that they were recognizable and in character. And that you liked the POV choice and the songs too!

Thank you so much again for this sweet review and all my love!
Chiara


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