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Review:TreacleTart says:
Hey Chiara!

Dropping by to leave you a couple of last minute hot seat reviews!

I don't normally read fluff and James/Lily is truthfully one of my least favorite ships, so I was a little hesitant about reading this story. But it turns out my worries were for nothing because you wrote this so well. It was sweet, but not syrupy. James was vulnerable instead of arrogant. Lily was fiery. It was just right.

One thing that really stood out to me was the etraordinary use of description in this. You always write good stories, but this was really breath taking. I could visualize everything you were talking about and just loved the way you used prose. Definitely your best piece in terms of description.

I also really liked that you wrote it in 2nd person. It can be hard to make 2nd person disappear into the story, but you handled it really well. It felt smooth and it helped me to immerse myself into the feelings and emotions of the story. It was a really smart choice.

And finally, as I mentioned at the beginning, I'm really glad that you gave James some vulnerability. All too often he's portrayed as this pretentious jerk and in those cases it's easy to understand why Lily hated him, but you did something that I think is hard to do. You made me like him. You made me understand why she changed her mind. It was a really good job.

Keep up the good work!

~Kaitlin

Author's Response: Hey, Kaitlin!
I'm so glad you managed to stop by and leave a few of your awesome reviews, even if it was a last minute thing! :D Thank you!

Well, I love Jily... Of course, I guess it depends on how they are portrayed... in my mind James is just this too reckless, too childish, too playful boy who sometimes acts without thinking about consequencies and the possibility of hurting someone. And I imagine him to be pretty awkward when it comes to Lily. I'm glad I made you like him!!! :D

I'm also so glad you liked the description! Modesty aside, I agree with you that this is my best piece in regard to that. I always struggle with description so much, but here it came out smoothly. I guess the songs helped.

I love second person! It highlights emotions like first and third just can't do! But it is tricky, so I'm glad you liked it!!!

Thank you so much for this amazing review!
I'll be back to answer the others soon!
All my love,
Chiara


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