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Review:Mr Penn says:
Hello Chiara, its Penn here for the review swap. Sorry I am late but RL has been a mess and I wanted to give the stories and reviews the proper time.

You started your story out with a little verse. That was really inspired. :D I write poetry for the fun of it too and that it can be tricky to fit it inside the bound context of a story and that it where you did a perfect task. It didn't seem out of place and only served to provide a perfect start for the story which was amazing. Your metaphors were divine, especially-

'It reminded you of Spring, of buds breaking on the trees to reveal new leaves, of nature waking up to a new life'

What was also pretty cool was how you showed the POVs of both James and Lily and reading Lily's reactions after the first kiss was really fun because you captured the essence of first love pretty well when both your heart and legs skip a beat.

Overall, an amazing job Chiara. Keep up the good work.

-Penn

Author's Response: Hello, Penn! :)
Ah, don't worry... I'm always so busy, so I can understand...

This was originally written for the Magic of the Musicals Challenge. I chose "Your Song" from Moulin Rouge as inspiration for James's section. That line about the eyes was just so fitting. And I love that song too much...

I'm so glad you liked the metaphores at the beginning! Aww, that's such a huge compliment, thank you! *blushing*

Thank you for saying that the two points of view were well done and that they captured well the feeling of first love! So glad you enjoyed the story!

Thank you so much again for proposing the swap. I'm hoping to be back to Equal measure soon.

Love and hugs,
Chiara


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