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Review:Jayna says:
Hey there Lo! I'm so sorry for how long it's taken me to finish our swap, I had definitely thought I would get time before now. Anyway, this was definitely an action-packed chapter!

First, a couple of things I liked were Molly's reaction when there was only one Chaser spot left on first string. It definitely helped make her character more relatable and it showed the reader one more reason why she wanted it so much, one more reason that she had done all she had done for Quidditch. In addition, that was another great twist that I think will make for some interesting relationships between the girls that did make first string and those that didn't. I had been starting to wonder why there were so many characters if there were only 7 on a team, and why Molly referred to someone as 'one of the other chasers', even though with Juliette, that would be the third and last chaser, not another. So basically, what I'm trying to say is that in a sports school as competitive as this one seems to be, it feels really realistic and helps answer some unexplained questions.

I really liked the whole scene where the teens were partying. It totally felt real, and totally like something a bunch of kids at a 7th year boarding school would do. I especially liked this one line, 'At some point we began to run, our laughs disappearing amongst the trees we passed, teenage antics dissolving in the wind.' It sounded super poetic and helped create that carefree atmosphere that you were going for.

The one thing that didn't seem quite right was how Molly and Juliette seemed to be best friends after what felt like (in story time) about a day. However, as I read I think I realized that this was not right after the first chapter. Maybe make the passing of time a little more evident?

Last, I loved the scene with Reid. I loved how they were comfortable and uncomfortable at the same time. The only problem is that now the shipper in me is confused. Cedric/Molly? Reid/Molly? On one hand, Cedric is just about adorable and they've known each other for a while, and on the other, Reid's a new person that seems to have some chemistry with her. Argh, I'm so confused.

Anyway, great job on this chapter overall! Excited to see where the next one goes! Once again, I'm so sorry for the lateness of this swap, but hopefully this slightly longer-than-normal review will help make up for it. :)

-Jayna

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