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Review:Dirigible_Plums says:
Hey,

This was an interesting one shot. I particularly liked the semantic field of a performance in the second paragraph, one that managed to change something as banal as his greasy hair into a wonderful sentence. It was an inspired metaphor and one of my favourite lines actually.

This one shot gives food for thought. Once upon a time, I despised Snape and then I liked him and then I reverted to disapproval again. What he did to Harry and the others wasn't fair. But the way you write about his innocence in childhood and his love for Lily awakes some compassion in me. You did well to have him remember their pre-Hogwarts days, a time when there was nothing other than hope for them.

Of course, he's not completely faultless, no matter how much he blames it on external circumstances. This line in particular - 'Anger flared in him at the injustice that life had rent upon him' - showcases this well. Snape has a tendency to state that life isn't fair, but also fails to understand his actions had a hand in what happened. So he tries his best to deal with his guilt and honour Lily somehow.

Plums xo

(For the HPFF Review-a-thon)

Author's Response: Thanks Plums for stopping by and for leaving such a lovely review. Snape is such a challenging character to write. He does blame everyone else in a way, but ultimately, it was his actions that led them down this road in the first place. I don't think he's necessarily bad, he just made stupid choices to try and fit in and this just started the great unraveling of all his dreams.

I quite like that line too. It seemed fitting really, adding a metaphor about being on stage in a challenge story for musicals :P

Thank you for the review.

Jacqui


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