hey rock star :)
I'm here with your other prize review and GOOD LORD, Kaitlin, what are you trying to do to me?!?!? First of all, I ADORE Tedromeda fics, so I was thrilled to see a new story about them on your page. Second of all, this was so sad! (But I loved it!) (Even though I'm crying.)
1st letter: You can really feel the affection Ted holds for his wife. I almost want more of that, more emotion, instead of the exposition. It strikes me as odd that he explains his reasons for running away. It seems like something he and Andromeda would have talked about before, maybe even fought about. Just a thought. :shy:
2nd letter: In a story like this, I think so much depends on picking strong details, and you did! Her anxiety every time she sees an owl and her sleeping on the couch made my heart ache for her. Her mention of the Weasleys is a perfect cannon tie-in, and her incredulity about Snape as head master was great, too.
I did catch one typo: "there shoes" should be "their shoes" ;)
3rd letter: Why would you tease us with his optimism like this??! TED, THERE IS NOT SAFETY IN NUMBERS! Go be safe! Please! We love you!
Why does his story line have to be so sad???
4th letter: So good! She still seems worried, but her excitement shines through wonderfully in the language you chose. And AWWW, baby Teddy is coming! I'm glad you included this. Again, killer detail about Florean's ice cream. Those little things pack a big punch. Her realism about the Trio is refreshing - she doesn't seem optimistic about them, and that makes sense, to be honest.
5th letter: Ugh, Ted's optimism is physically painful. I don't think I ever realized how sad this death makes me. #SaveTed (#TonksNotCruz)
6th letter: OH NO OH NO OH NO. And don't you dare say I knew this was coming. That makes no difference. I don't want to read on, but at the same time I must... *sobs and covers eyes with hands, peeking through fingers*
7th letter: BRB, TEARS. You're heartless - this got me right in the feels. (You aren't actually heartless, obviously.) (But seriously, this is SO SAD.) Her disbelief makes it way worse. Brilliant choice there on your part!
Final letter: askljfskjsa WHAT HAVE YOU DONE TO MY SOUL?
Also, I love how she used their names again, as if deep down she knows it doesn't matter anymore.
I loved this! It's one of those gut-wrenching stories that I just can't resist. You've clearly done a masterful job giving it weight, because I am literally sick to my stomach with sadness and regret about Ted and pain for Andromeda.
I know we're always saying what a champ you are for writing so much, but I don't know if people often mention how incredibly impressive the quality of your work is, especially in light of (though also independently of) how quickly you write it. So let me just say: You are a talented writer. :wub:
good luck in the challenge!!