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Review:Bardic Magic says:
Nicely done, Kevin! or Coimbhain, in Gaelic...not sure what it is in Pictish. ;)

As you mentioned in your author's notes, I did have the Giant Squid part figured out (and the grindylows), but you got me with the geography.

The name Galan and the reference to the Seven Kingdoms led me to Ireland. Wales was out, because Galan didn't have any double consonants, "Y's" or "W's" in it. :) Then, in your notes you mentioned he was from 2nd Century CE Northern Scotland. I had to google the Irish tuatha to realize there weren't enough (only 5) in that time period.

I liken (just my view, here) Galan's ability to a cleric in D&D: calls upon his deity for the power to use magic...sometimes performing magic that wasn't his intent, but ended up being the deity's intent.(Been there, done that.)

I must say, though, it wasn't as weird as I was expecting (hoping?). Does that say something about me? LOL!

Just a note...check your punctuation. I think there may have been some editing which left a word out, here and there, but the punctuation stayed. I'll have to reread it to give you specific examples.

Other than that, kudos namesake! Excellent story.

Author's Response: Howdy Kevin!

I'm glad you were able to figure out the Giant Squid bit - as you know I was quite worried this thing was just going to be very odd, period.

Originally I intended to pepper in Gaelic actually, but my research revealed that the Picts had their own sort of hybrid tongue and I wasn't going to attempt that so I just stuck with the modern and made the reference at the end.

As far as the cleric comparison, I definitely see where you're coming from (having played a lot of D&D-based computer games, though not the actual game itself (tabletop or LARP - yet). I wanted him to model more after the Sorcerer class from BGII, but injected the prayer bit as: (1) Picts are believed to have been spiritual, but probably polytheistic and/or animalistic and (2) I wanted to present his inner magic as something that he wasn't necessarily aware he was capable of. So he cracked it up to spirituality, but in reality it was his own magic, if that makes any sense.

Thanks for the notes on punctuation. I'm horrible about editing/proofing, but if I ever get back round to doing so to all my stories (probably when I go into finally editing the finished product of Evolution), I'll take a look!

Thanks for the R&R!

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