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Review:marauderfan says:
Hey there! I am here with the review you requested many aeons ago and I'm so sorry for the delay. As it happens, I'd already read and reviewed chapter 1 a while ago, so I'll review chapter 2 for you now!

This is a great chapter. I think your strongest element is characterisation - despite that the plot diverges from canon, you really do an incredible job of keeping each character canon and I can definitely see your versions of Harry, Hermione, Ron, and Draco as the ones I read about for seven books. You've perfectly taken their canon personalities and adapted them into this plot.

Draco in particular is really interesting, and this chapter highlights his pride. Its clear he's trying to show he hasn't changed that much and keep his outside image proud and indifferent, but he really does feel the effects of the war, as evidenced by that last paragraph. I simultaneously feel bad for him as well as kind of being irritated at his calling Hermione a mudblood and being snappy - and at the same time can't blame him for that. He just seems very lost like he's trying to figure out who he is now, which is why he's clinging to his past habits as a form of identity, but doesnt want anyone to know that.

So yes, in response to your questions, I do fimd the story interesting and it is engaging enough that I find myself wondering what will happen and wanting to read on. It is very well written, although I do notice that it switches verb tenses into past tense occasionally. This fortunately is easy to fix with a read-through or a beta.

I think you're doing great work here. Again I am so sorry for taking forever, but I think you should be proud of this story and keep writing!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much for the great review!

I have worked had to keep the characters real, so I'm glad that came across. I pretty much love writing Draco because he can be so complex and layered. :)

I might ask you to come around again! Glad you like it so far.


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